|Compelling scenes draw readers|
Al though the key word is "compelling," there's a world of difference between convincingly presenting a story and grabbing readers by the collar.
Consider these examples:
"If I've told you once," he said, waving his hands, "I've told you a thousand times — you must come with me. I'm telling you, it's life or death we're talking."
"I've asked before," he said, "I know, but I've got to ask again — come with me. Don't make me beg."
Notice that the word "you" is used four times in some form in the first example, not once in second. Which is more compelling?
Exercise: For inspiration, visit your local café, and write a scene that's over the top, dramatic. Put it aside for a week, and work on other stories, then return, do a save-as and pare the scene to its essentials. Which is more compelling?
Advanced Exercise: To take the edited scene to the next level, consolidate long phrases, replace ambiguous words with precise ones, and revise every cliché. This can be a first step to solid flash fiction. If you prefer the first example above, consider this:
"I've told you a thousand times — you must come. It's life and death we're talking."
Resources: For more on writing compelling scenes, visit WritingWorld.com and "Components of a Good Opening Scene."